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Seriously, IMHO, this article needs a massive rewrite. Things like "(which was formed in 1 year....weird)" really do not sound professional or encyclopedic AT ALL. In the same vein, you reference lots and lots of astrographical terms that, in the context of this entry, have not been defined yet (Vulture Arm, for example, or Orion Arm). | Seriously, IMHO, this article needs a massive rewrite. Things like "(which was formed in 1 year....weird)" really do not sound professional or encyclopedic AT ALL. In the same vein, you reference lots and lots of astrographical terms that, in the context of this entry, have not been defined yet (Vulture Arm, for example, or Orion Arm). | ||
| − | In addition, "This comes at a cost though. They use a lot of warships, ranging from Cruisers to Corvettes with Flak guns on them. Long story short, if the Arcadians didn't use Stratagy and Tactics (as the Vultures only used Tactics) it may have been Lights out For Arcadia." borders on rambling and incoherent; It is impossible to use [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Military_tactics Tactics] or [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Strategy Strategy] exclusively. | + | In addition, "This comes at a cost though. They use a lot of warships, ranging from Cruisers to Corvettes with Flak guns on them. Long story short, if the Arcadians didn't use Stratagy and Tactics (as the Vultures only used Tactics) it may have been Lights out For Arcadia." borders on rambling and incoherent; It is impossible to use [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Military_tactics Tactics] or [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Strategy Strategy] exclusively. [[User:The E|The E]] 21:20, 16 December 2009 (UTC) |
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Seriously, IMHO, this article needs a massive rewrite. Things like "(which was formed in 1 year....weird)" really do not sound professional or encyclopedic AT ALL. In the same vein, you reference lots and lots of astrographical terms that, in the context of this entry, have not been defined yet (Vulture Arm, for example, or Orion Arm).
In addition, "This comes at a cost though. They use a lot of warships, ranging from Cruisers to Corvettes with Flak guns on them. Long story short, if the Arcadians didn't use Stratagy and Tactics (as the Vultures only used Tactics) it may have been Lights out For Arcadia." borders on rambling and incoherent; It is impossible to use Tactics or Strategy exclusively. The E 21:20, 16 December 2009 (UTC)
